【英検準1級】ライティング講座受けてみました


2016年度第1回の試験まで2週間となりました。
受験予定の皆様、学習は順調に進んでいますか?

今回から準1級のライティング問題が、eメールからエッセイに変わる点は以前当ブログの記事でもお知らせ致しました。バリューイングリッシュでは対策講座を開設し、おかげさまで多数お申し込みをいただいております。虎の巻も無料公開されていますが、もうご覧いただけましたでしょうか?

私、カスタマーサポートの岩田も虎の巻で予習した後、早速試してみましたのご紹介させていただきます!

まず、申し込みをし支払いを終えると、以下の問題が送られてきます。

Write an essay on the given TOPIC
Use TWO of the POINTS below to support your answer
Structure: Introduction, main body , and conclusion
Suggested Length: 120-150 words

(TOPIC)
Agree or disagree:
Studying abroad is beneficial for everybody

(POINTS)
second language/exposure to cultures/Cost/area of study

本当は私の考えとしてはagreeに近い気がしますが、disagreeの方が書きやすそうなのでdisagreeeに決定。
頭の中で構成を考え、以下の通り回答。そして送信!

(Student’s Answer)

I don’t agree with the idea that studying abroad is beneficial for everybody and I have two reasons to support my opinion. (22)

Firstly, when we go abroad, we have to speak another language, not Japanese. Not all people are good at speaking other languages. We have to spend much time to master them. It’s not beneficial for people who are not interested in learning another language to study abroad. (47)

Secondly, studying abroad costs much money. We need not only school expenses but also the cost for living there. In fact, only people who have enough money can study abroad, I think. In stead of going abroad at a high price, today we can use the internet and get overseas information at home at a low price. (57)

For these two reasons, I don’t agree that studying aboroad is beneficial for everybody. (14)

140words

3営業日以内ということで、私の場合は2日後に返信アリ。
書いた物がしっかり分析されて返ってきました。

Checking

(Introduction)
I don’t agree with the idea that studying abroad is beneficial for everybody and I have two reasons to support my opinion.

(Body 1)

(Topic sentence 1)
Firstly, when we go abroad, we have to speak another language, not Japanese.

(Supporting details 1)
Not all people are good at speaking other languages. We have to spend much time to master them. It’s not beneficial for people who are not interested in learning another language to study abroad.

(Body 2)

(Topic sentence 2)
Secondly, studying abroad costs much money.

(Supporting details 2)
We need not only school expenses but also the cost for living there. In fact, only people who have enough money can study abroad, I think. In stead of going abroad at a high price, today we can use the internet and get overseas information at home at a low price.

(Conclusion)
For these two reasons, I don’t agree that studying aboroad is beneficial for everybody.

Feedback
Clear structure and cohesive devices: Excellent
Stance is clear: Excellent
2 Points are clearly stated: Excellent
Effective use of grammar, vocabulary, and cohesive devices: Very good

Comments
Overall, this essay is great!
Red: in + someone’s + stead = instead of
Blue: not a very strong support for the point about studying abroad. You may say :
“learn at home” instead of “get overseas information at home”.

Feedbackでは各項目でexcellent,very goodなどの評価があり、課題が一目でわかります。

commentsでは、具体的に間違いを指摘してくれ、さらにこういう表現にした方がいいとアドバイスをもらえます。

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書いただけで満足されていませんか?!
→第三者に見てもらうことが大事です。

何度も書いて型をマスターすることが大事ですね。
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